A world i don't want to live in

A short poem!

Look at me 

I am head over heels

In love with you

With your smile

Your voice

The way you close your eyes

And run your fingers through your hair

when you're tired

Please don't ever

take that away from me

A world without you

Is a world that

I never want to live in

Reviews

[BlankCypher]

I love this. For many different reasons :)
It's misleading at the start, almost innocent, then it gives the hint of desperation that ties it all together.
It is very well written and I really enjoy the structure you gave it.
All in all one of my favourites I've seen!
Well done :)

[Duckey]

Oh my, Thank you so much! It's one of the ones i wrote about someone i actually know, and i think being able to have that person in mind when you are writing, shows your relationship with them more than you thought at first sight. It kind of makes them shine through the work, which is one of the things i liked about this one when i wrote it, it was just so real.

[BlankCypher]

Exactly! When the experience was real I think it fuels us just that bit more. :)

[Duckey]

I agree :3

[Sunya]

Its beautifully written :) the way it rhymes is really good...
Well done :)
-Sunya