innocent

you the one that has been gived this life of hell, it's all over now, there know way out anymore, he who walk behind the river of blood  has came to fine you, there notthing that can save you not ever the blood of the innocent can save your soil now, you who are  damm to this earth there know where to hind, maybe the soul of the upon bron could save the innocent life on earth and give  heaven the gife of life on  earth. he who walk behind the rose. who father bleed the river of blood, he watch thought who are damm to these hell on earth,  wing of the innocent,blood  of thought who are damm to walk this earth alone, give birth  of demons  on earth with in our selfs

Reviews

[fireblossom]

You have the gift for writing I think. I found I had to work to correct your spelling and grammar errors. That detracted from your poem. Edit your writing PWF. Not when you first write them down...let that be natural and free...later though...before you post...edit a time or two. That is when you finish the writing and make it the best it can be.

[poems with feeling]

thank u

[TJ]

lots of dark imagery in this one. it is very visual and very imaginitize although there are many spelling errors and it lacks form but it has potential

[The old me]

extremely well written and wording is very visual.