A Sun

The sun is that women who strikes you every morning, day and night
She removes any feeling of fright and blinds you so bright
The sun is the realization of one being the center of your universe
She inspires growth
She illuminates the past and the future
The sun is the hottest thing not from this Earth,
Metaphorically speaking about her birth

A big bang of brilliance
Beauty in the making of life
In search of a chance,
When ready but not yet known,
To take the first glance and make it last forever

Author's Note

So needed



Thank You!

Reviews

[Girl Friday (Sarah W.)]

Really enjoyed the last stanza of this one...it struck the deepest for me emotionally. I also enjoyed the personification of the Sun as a woman, very fitting, because in lore the sun is usually depicted in the form of a male and the moon is female. You write a thought provoking piece.

First line: Tense issue--I think you mean "the sun is that woman..."

[Empirik]

Thank you for your thoughts on this! You seem to know how to read my syntax between the lines, and yes it was fun to change lore and culture while creating a thought to daydream on. :)

[Emily Dickinson Jr.]

I liked how it had good metaphors though I'm not to sure about where you did and didn't rhyme though that might just be a personal preference of mine :)

[Aislinn]

One word, amazing. The imagery is beautiful. The metaphor is impeccable. Lovely. Keep up the good work.

[The dark story]

wow...this is so nice...i really liked the way you have described the sun so elegantly ...the diction makes it more nice...the last line...really...that just blew me awway..great work!!!

[Empirik]

Thank you so so so much!!!

[The dark story]

you are most welcome!!

[The dark story]

you are most welcome!!

[The dark story]

you are most welcome!!

[Kawaiikitty96]

I had trouble interpreting it, but since it's from a guy's perspective (I assume you're a guy, forgive me if I'm wrong) maybe that's why I don't understand. The rhythm was catchy: I love lines 6 and 7

[Deron Alexis]

really cool poem thanx for sharing your originality the description was still possible enough for me to relate to but never got boring excellent balance

[Robbie~xoxo~]

Glory be the Sun that warms your heart and make you smile! Such a lovely vision you have painted in my mind! This is very inspiring...nicely done, my friend!

[Empirik]

I have been on a positive tip these days, but it has been about a week and a half since I have written something new. It's going to come soon. So extremely happy you feel this with such inspiration like the vitamin D which enters your skin effortlessly this is suppose to make you happy too. :)

[Robbie~xoxo~]

It does! It does!...you're talking my kind of language, for I am a beach baby from the islands...I up on the edge of the horizon..where the sun always shines. :)

[Robbie~xoxo~]

~I grew up on the edge of the horizon~

[Empirik]

Lovely!!! That is extra warming~

[Robbie~xoxo~]

:) and this is a wonderful write... need more vitamin D! :)

[Empirik]

hehehe...don't we all. :) I couldn't agree more. Thank you so much!

[MOON]

The sun life giver , it shines on everything. Lovely write and tribute

[Dandelion]

This is well laid out. I really enjoyed reading. Your word choice is what really got me. Great write!

[sithlordjp]

In a sea of poems about the moon, I found it very refreshing to read your beautiful piece about the sun! Love the feminine qualities you gave to it, well done!