Sturdy Cloth

Low price doesn't always rhyme with quality

Some shop for food and some shop for clothes

Some shop for presents while their joy shows

 

Some like to spend and some just for sport

And some buy even when money’s short

 

But Jude is a widow who’s lost her man

His name’s Daniel but she called him Dan

 

She’s right now in the shop to buy a shroud

But the price is steep, for crying out loud!

 

Why so expensive she tells the teller?

We sell only the best, he tries to tell ‘er

 

But it’s cheaper next door she retorts

The man is amused, gives a smile of sorts

 

Go there, then and buy what you came to seek

The deceased’s knees will peek through in a week

Reviews

[Moonie]

Woohoo, woody sure rhymes with a great rhymer(is that a word? Now it is ..)....bet the cloth was too weak to last for a week...

[Woody]

if you want the departed loved one to be comfortable, don't look at the price.
the best thing about my poems is the rhyme. piece of cake. as for the rhythm and scan and all that rigmarole... *sigh*
thanks Moon :)

[Valentine]

Some widows would have been trying to save each buck for herself. Just tossed an old blanket over him. Kathie

[Woody]

now that's mean but sensible. some would buy the best coffin there is. mahogany with inlaid decorations. waste of money when you think about it. or maybe not :)
thanks Kathie.

[Stan]

like this one to Woody.....could also be called a 'shorts' review....
have a good day! Stan

[Woody]

thank you very much for taking the trouble Stan. you have a good one, too.

[KWP]

you have such an imagination :) love your work ...

here's a tip ... read it over, read it out loud then you will see if it 'scans' or not ... I never knew what scan was either til i just read it :) xx

sending love

[Woody]

thanks a lot KWP. been having a huge problem with the scan but I'm working on it. I realize it's not the number of syllables only. it's that damn rhythm. I keep counting on my fingers but that's not enough. but I know what you mean. thanks for the tip. incidentally, I'm not really a poet, to tell the truth. I wish you'd read some of my short story. I've a feeling you may like them.

[KWP]

I will read them chick when my mind is not so stressed x x

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

A clever and quite fun piece to read, well done, good job.

[Woody]

thank you Thomas. Just a little something for laughs. Now, your poems! Boy! They're out of reach.

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

Thank you and your welcome.

[Rita L. Sev]

This is a fun piece with clever rhymes, Engluva!

[Woody]

thanks a lot Rita. probably not my best. Poetry is not my forte, to be honest.

[Marie]

This is good rhyming, and a clever premise, But it doesn't scan.

[Woody]

thanks Marie but what's "scan"?

[Marie]

Oh dear. That's hard to explain. Poetry should follow a certain syllable count. You can pick it up by reading some of the poets I've mentioned to you and noting how their verses make a rythm. You can go on the Internet and find help there.

If your first couplet read: "Some shop for money, and some shop for clothes; some shop for presents while joy overflows," it would scan.

If your second couplet read "Some like to spend, and spend just for sport./ Some buy too much when their money is short

[Woody]

thanks Marie. I see what you mean now. I do stop to count the syllables on my fingers. it doesn't seem to work well. yep, what I lack is a sense of rhythm.