days

winter days vs summer days

 

Winter days

Are short

Cold

Stiff

Like stubby, frozen fingers

 

Summer days

Are long

Langorous

Flowing

Like warm, caressing hands.

 

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Winter days are short

They're always stiff and cold

They feel like stubby fingers

That freeze up when they're old

 

Summer days are long

They flow with utter grace

Feel soft upon the skin

Like warm caressing rays.

Author's Note

this time, Marie provided the free verse and I tried the rhymed version

Reviews

[M.E.Lyle]

OK, which one of you has a degree in meteorology. Summers are warm; actually here in Texas...blistering, and winters are cold. Things happen. Sometimes stubby fingers even get frost bite and fall off. Yikes, no more guitar playing.
I love what you guys are doing.

[Woody]

meteorology? haha. must be Marie. I just tagged along. now you watch those precious fingers, unless you're as good as Hendrix and can play with your teeth.
thank you M.E. :)

[M.E.Lyle]

I have no teeth, so I have to gum it.

[Terpsichore]

This makes me long for summer. Winter is so dreary, shame it's necessary. T

[Woody]

thanks T. but summer's just left. already miss it? I don't particularly like winter but I look forward to it when I've had enough of the suffocating heat.

[Vidya Bacchus]

I liked them both.You and Marie are so very talented you could make stiff and cold sound good lol

[Woody]

do I sense some unsavoury innuendoes here?
thank you dear. seeing what Batman and Robin are doing gave me the idea of teaming up with a professional.

[Vidya Bacchus]

Hahaha me and innuendoes ?Perish the thought lol.You are welcome :)

[Tom]

Creative personification, winter like frozen fingers/summer like warm caressing skin, impressive poetry Woody!

[Woody]

thanks a lot Tom. but the merit goes to Marie. I only trailed behind.

[Beccy]

Both versions are really descriptive. Second verse on the free verse version is lovely.

Beccy.

[Woody]

thanks a lot, Dear. I started this "game" with Marie hoping that her genius may somehow rub off on me.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

even though i prefer the non-rhyming version...
you made your version flow with some excellent rhythmic cadence.

i really like the effect of this...love "stiff like frozen fingers"

[Woody]

much appreciated jacob. I'm not surprised you prefer that one. you're siding with your "older" friend :)

[Matching Socks]

Nicely done. :)
I think you delivered.

[Woody]

aww.. very kind of you. either reviewers are being nice to me or I'm really learning to write poems.

[Matching Socks]

The latter I'd say... :-)

[Woody]

you're so sweet :)

[Matching Socks]

On a good day maybe. ;)