night

a rhymed version of Marie's free verse of the same title

The balmy night has tiptoed in

Gently nudging off the day

Its quarter of lime in sequins

Reigning on indigo bay

Studded with diamond seeds

On a black flowering spray 

Author's Note

Marie wanted me to post this but I'm not sure about the rhythm and the scan and all that jazz.

Reviews

[Amy Rose]

Very beautiful, also nicely put together. Magnificent poem, you're a great poet. Keep it up Woody, I can't stop reading your poems. My favorite line was "Its quarter of lime in sequins" It has a great flow, you should definitely write more poems, congrats :)

[Woody]

thank you so much Dear. I'm super glad you liked it :)

[Marie]

Rythm is not everything. Poetry has flexible rules. I correspond with a poet whose work is so terrible she makes you look like Ralph Waldo Emerson and me like Emily Dickenson.

I am going to post "Night" once again as a haiku.

[Woody]

haha me Emerson? thanks for the compliment.
you are indefatigable. you've never giving up on me. you still think I can amount to something poetry-wise.
thank you Marie

[M.E.Lyle]

Hey, I like your version too. Rhyme is good. It adds a different dimension to the same theme. Good work you guys.

[Woody]

why, thank you very much M.E. appreciate the encouragement.

[Marie]

It's not your poetry but your witty short stories I think can become something. The woman I refer to has actually studies poetry (or so she tells me).But she has no concept of what it means to write a poem.