The Great Race

A poem based on 1 Corinthians 9:24.

Now there were three runners preparing for a race.
Each was hoping to win God's grace.

The man fired the gun.
Signaling that the race had begun.

The runners broke away from the starting line.
Each one hoping that they would not fall behind.

The first runner started the race off strong.
But the distance got to him and he gave up when he knew that he hope was gone.

The second one ran farther than the first one.
But got distracted and lost the path he was on.

Now the third runner he stayed strong till the end.
And the race he did win.

Now what did he do that the other runners didn't?
He kept his eyes focused on winning the blue ribbon.

Do you not know that in a race all the runners run, but only one gets the prize?
Run your race in such a way that you get the prize.

We are all running in the race called life.
Which one of the runners are you?

Reviews

[A. Amos]

Another good read your a gidted writer..

[Erik Daniel]

So are you! Means a lot bro. Thanks!

[Soma-ko]

I'm the one who has walked off the main road to find my own for a moment, so some may say I'm lost, but at the moment I have no definite endpoint. The beauty of life is that you can never truly see the road beneath you, but with every step you take, ground forms beneath your feet. So you can visibly see the road behind you. Enjoyed.

[Erik Daniel]

Thanks! Means a lot!

[StayAnchored]

You have such a talent and I love seeing you use it for God's glory! This poem is fantastic and definitely made me do a reality check on how I'm running this race called life! Great job :)

[Erik Daniel]

Thank you so much! This is actually one of the first poems I ever wrote! Glad you liked it!

[StayAnchored]

You're very welcome! I'm quite impressed that this is one of the first you wrote... your talent is astounding!

[Erik Daniel]

Wow thank you. Means a lot.

[Erik Daniel]

You should check out my two new poems. Prettier Than A Porn Star and Hated By The World.

[~*~Peace Keeper~*~]

This isn't your best poem but it is still good. I like the message in this one, in order for us to make it through this life we have to keep looking at our goal and not give up. Sometimes it is not easy but it will be worth it all in the end.

[Erik Daniel]

I wrote this one a long time ago. I know it's not my best.

[Erik Daniel]

But thank you still!

[~*~Peace Keeper~*~]

You're welcome, well it shows then how you have improved ^^

[Erik Daniel]

Ha. I know right!?

[~*~Peace Keeper~*~]

haha yep, everyone is a little rusty when they first start, some of my poems are not that great but yeah xD all that matters is that you keep trying. This one is kinda similar to your narrow path one, like it's pretty close to the same message lol I just realized that xD

[Erik Daniel]

Funny you mentioned that. The Narrow Path is actually the new version of The Great Race. I just figured I would post this one because it still has a good point.

[~*~Peace Keeper~*~]

lol Yay I guessed right xD

[Erik Daniel]

Congratulations! lol

[~*~Peace Keeper~*~]

xD I was just thinking that The Narrow Path is better version of it too lmbo

[Stefanie Holmes]

"The starting gun went off in the man's hand.
And signaled that the race had began." I know you are trying to rhyme, but 'began' is the wrong tense in this sentence. You would actually need the word 'begun' Not sure if there is a way to reword it and keep the rhyming or you can just leave it like it is. :) Just some thoughts for you.
I really liked this poem. Creative and inspirational!

~Stefanie

[Erik Daniel]

Thank you for pointing that out! I had thought about it too. I'm trying to come up with a new way to word it. Thank you for the review!

[Stefanie Holmes]

Maybe reword the first line so the word gun is last? That way you have gun and than begun rhyming.

[Erik Daniel]

There we go.

[Tarella]

Really encouraging poem......thanks...life is a race and we should all strive to win the ultimate prize...eternity with God.