her heart

A Poem by Erin

There you lay

unable to ~~beat~~

for all the things he did wrong

like saying he won't cheat

© 2011 Erin

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FlatDaddy

Well, Erin, it is hard to say much about this piece because there is so little to it. You need more meat on these frail bones. As it is, it reads more like a fortune cookie post. That doesn't mean it's bad, just that there's not much to it -- yet. Good writing is not easy. Take your time and put some flesh on this. It could be quite good.
FlatDaddy

Posted 3 Weeks Ago

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Added on September 2, 2011
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Erin

Surprise, AZ

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My name is Erin(: im 19 years old and writing is my PASSION. my English III teacher, Mr. Johnson has been such an inspiration to me and helped me become a better writer. i have taken creative writing .. more..