Morning

the feelings and scents of a beachside morning

 Crisp, warm fingers of light gently crack open my weary eyes
Distantly aware of the crashing salty waves against soft sands
The tender salt air brushing my tousled hair across my face
Stretching out across downy pillows, in wholesome white lace

A lazy foot rubbing, unaware, against harsh wooden floors
Tripping slowly forward to the curtains flowing in the breeze
Emphasising need for rest, pink lips broaden with a yawn
Seeing out down to the dew atop the recently mowed lawn

Healing smells drift up leisurely from the tiny herb garden
It starts again with the sweet kiss of sea salt and mellow sun
Awakened now are the senses as I lean from under this awning
Smelling rich aromas of herbs and coffee,
I know that it is morning.

 

 

Author's Note

was written for a contest using the senses

Reviews

[Gary H]

Having spent much time living near the sea I see this as beautiful morning imagery. Always my regret that I never had the time to appreciate the descriptions you mention here but I know you speak truly.
One point that didn't sit so well was the mention of 'salt' so many times. I think I would have changed 'crashing salty waves' to 'crashing ocean waves' and with 'the sweet kiss of sea salt' maybe missed the 'salt' out.
I don't have an aversion to 'salt' just feel it took over the wonderful words.
Good luck in the competition.

[Raven Held]

Ahhh, nothing like reading something like this on a morning where the sky's a lovely shade of pale blue. Which is what I'm doing now!

I love your description. Couldn't help humming the song 'Morning has Broken' by Cat Stevens after reading this.

Sweet. Nice work. Thanks for sharing!

Loves,
Raven

[EGabriellS]

I wish that was how I felt every morning...thanks for sending it to me, i liked it. :)

[Butterflymom]

I loved the first line! I could see and feel it. Great job!

[Angela Rose]

This was beautiful. Thank you for sharing

[Rie Sheridan Rose]

The senses contest, right? It shows. :) The only suggestion I would have is considering changing "arms of light" to "FINGERS of light", because it is hard to open your eyes with arms, and if you are personifying the sun, you want to be consistent with the personification. Beautiful, sensual write. I really enjoyed it.

[~Wandering Soul~]

just lettin people know that this was written for a contest..........just if it dnt make sense in some way
lol