A Chance Meet

Some say things happen by chance, I guess i wrote keeping that in mind.

A Chance Meet

As I lay under the shade,
looking at my blade.
I realize I cannot think,
her face flashes and I remember that wink.

And so I end up having a smile,
  I who never showed any emotion just for a while,
and now my hands shake as I hold that blade,
  realizing the bloody past I have made.

Yet why is it that I want to see,
that smiling face and have her besides me.
It feels I am being senile,
yet I don't mind this feeling for the while.

So I end up getting again,
deciding to visit that place once again,
and as I walked through the doors,
I saw her cleaning the floors.

We were all alone it seemed,
a chance I had only dreamed.
So I bent down and placed my hand,
over hers that were tanned.

She drew her hands away in a rush,
but then seeing my sudden flush,
For I never knew such delicacy,
and didn't know how to handle such intimacy.

I guess I was a really shy fool,
thinking I could remain cool.
But the touch I felt was real,
yet what my heart felt was surreal.

She seemed to recognize me now,
but I wasn't sure now what to say and how.
Is this what one would call love,
surely not as I look above.

She was standing now her eyes looking,
right into mine and they were sparkling.

My heart jumped once again,
oh how I wish I could complain,
this brain of mine has seemingly frost,
my heart now is completely lost.

Yet why do I end up smiling,
and why does she start laughing.
it's so strange so odd,
yet I didn't find this flawed.

I let go of my fears,
my past and the guilt that sears,
this heart and eats my wretched soul,
for I have her now as my goal,
and I intend to be the one that makes her whole .

Author's Note

Please ignore grammatical errors, a please criticize me as harshly as possible .

Reviews

[Greg Agee]

I thought it was very well written. I didn't understand making her whole. Us whole ? That's just me and just a point. You get your message across elegantly. I'm very impressed and wanting to read more. Thank You !!

[Érenn]

Thank you for your kind words, and i was trying to use the yin-yang concept, i.e. you need two pieces to get the whole picture. But i am happy you liked it ^^

[Greg Agee]

I get that and it's beautifully written. I get that... Thank you

[jacob erin-cilberto]

if you can laugh together, you can love together...so hard to break the ice...

a little bit, the rhyme feels forced at times...but the sentiment comes through strongly...

j.

[Érenn]

Thank you so much and yes i am trying to break the shackles of always trying to rhyme and i hope to make headway in that department while ensuring the sentiment can be clearly seen as well.