Paradise

Misplacing Paradise

Its not easy to dis-attach
a happy heart
from true paradise.

I felt so tongue tied
between your parting lips
that I  had nothing more to say than
"kiss me,
one more time".

So slow and passionate,
your skin caressed my flesh
and I fell so in love
with our infinite attraction.

Dreams captured in our eyes
as we stared into each others glances.
Your voice rolled through my ears
and placed a smile across my face.

Once you have had a taste
there is no were left to fall
but into madness.
and my heart mourns over it's loss:
the ecstasy that is
your paradise

Author's Note

Please let me know what you think. Thank You

Reviews

[❀ Gabriela ..]

So sad, but really beautiful!! Excellent poem!

[symmetryAsymmetry]

I felt so tongue tied between your parting lips that I had nothing more to say than "kiss me, one more time".

I really liked this stanza...overall too this is good...though, a li'l cliched...but that's probably coz of the universal theme..

[Justin White]

This is really beautiful.

[Kaa Na Kalyanasundaram]

So slow and passionate,
your skin caressed my flesh
and I fell so in love
with our infinite attraction.

Oh........lovely lines. great. my regards.

[Distant horizons]

Beautifully written, with sadness and loss replacing what once was. Perfectly painted once more.