Crying

The harsh reality of today's world is just too hard for a kid to handle

Crying, was all she did
had no strength to talk or walk
not even to move a finger
The once strong girl is forever lost

All inside of her head
Wishing she could be free again
Crying, she saw the real world
The reality world of today

Now she sleeps
Always hoping to be free from her cage
holding her stuff bear with dry tears
Only hearing faint "Be strong" behind of her door

Reviews

[Alicia™]

A good theme, but I'm not really a fan of this - sorry. More length should probably fix that! There's a lot of emotion in there, but I don't think the words are impactful enough to make the poem that short. A little pointer would be the change "the once strong girl" into "the once strong little girl", since you're talking about a kid. Also, "stuffed", not "stuff".

Aaaand, sorry if I'm sounding a little harsh, lol.

[Rose Tyler]

Excellent, like every single one of your other pieces you wrote. I enjoy to read everything you write, and sometimes they make me sad, but they are always beautiful.