My Harlot From Hell

This was a project I did for World History on the Renaissance Era. Its based off of religious ideals in the past. I am not religious...so please don't think of me as a religious person.

O how love is unfair
Plaguing my soul with an unwanted curse
Abandoning all hope of my own care
For thou to massacre like a gentle nurse

With arms open wide
And a veil on thou’s skin
Thou danced around inside
Laughing at how her life will begin

A child with no parents to guide
A life of a w***e has risen up high
A life with no suicide
Only the desire for others to die

Every night is filled with moans and groans
Laughter and pleasure dance around
Her head rests against solid stones
Her legs grind on the broken ground

My soul is a bloody drape
Evil has entered my heart
I need help to escape
From the harlot’s deadly heart

O father, master of our fate
With the wisdom of all
Can you guide me away from fate?
And answer this call?

Reviews

[♪Barklight♪]

"Wow" is all I can say, your poems are awsome!!!

[DemitriJ]

very provoking... though i am not from a christian religion i love the way it tells how someone is trying to escape from sin and its desires. wonderful and beautiful indeed!!!

[Alex Crow]

Very interesting. Good job

[Brittany]

This was excellent. I loved the word choices and flow. Very well done. I really enjoyed it.

[Lunny]

it's really good, I like it ^^

[Coyote Poetry]

You did very well. I thought I was reading a master Poet from the past. I like the flow of thoughts.
"A child with no parents to guide
A life of a w***e has risen up high
A life with no suicide
Only the desire for others to die"
I like the questions at the end of the poem. Thank you for the outstanding poetry.
Coyote

[FJ Davis]

A fine, emotion-infused offering, Wolf.
Enjoyed it!

[RawrsomeSami]

I wuv it!!!!! I can't describe this in terms of good grammar or a good use of words...Or actual words in general.. On how this...I don't know how to put it!! Grr!! How it... Expresses itself to me? I'm not even sure if that makes sense!! All I know is, that this poem of yours, is Aweso~me! >.<

[Robert The Frank]

Wonderful write...i was amazed how you were able to write in an old English tone you did it so well...and describing the curse of lust was spot on with good detail.
Awesome poem wolf!

[Leslie Philibert]

What I like here is the change from the classical poetry language of O and thou of the first two verses to the harder language of the later verses, and then the touching , appelative, religious tone of the last verse, a poem that goes through a whole range of feelings. A good write, I hope your teacher knows that he or she has a talented writer in the class.