a mask

wrote this one a couple days ago, what do ya think?:)

tears of joy

tears of pain

a lies ploy

a scream again

hide behind a face

hide behind a lie

stand strong, full of grace

always laugh never cry

smiles grow

upon that face

only you will know

its only good as lace

never tell

never show

none know your hell

appear above, fall below

no one will ever catch

no one cares to see

heart never to reattach

don't show, this you is me

little girls

hide all day

her pain never unfurls

she never truly plays

one she trusted

he lost it still

now her heart stays encrusted

so she no one can kill

smile wave

nod laugh

no trust gave

not even half

Author's Note

yeah, i know this is no good, but please tell me how i can improve it and what you think when you read it

Reviews

[Ethale Captor]

I can fully relate to this piece, excellent work.

[quinfinn]

this sounds like a lot of trauma and personal pain. there is a sad longing and some deep regret here, i think. very nicely worded and penned to make an easy read. well done!

[Sir Joseph]

Why is the mask there?

[Sir Joseph]

Makes one wonder of the true beauty behind the mask. Good piece.

[khalid]

very nicely penned, big deal of optimism and joy spread here..

[Ethereal Eclipse]

thank you for the review, though i do not see how this is a optimistic piece, will you care to enlighten me?

[Lonely Islander]

This was a sweet beautiful piece and it's a shame u think its up to no good...i think maybe you could work on the rhythm a bit....for example the first few paragraphs had a good rhythm to it but maybe it lost the beat at last a bit..but on the whole, it was a good job:-):-):-D.

[Ethereal Eclipse]

thank you so much:) i will try and apply that for future poems:)