We were wrong

I knew we were wrong..I thought we could be strong
When I saw the weakness in your eyes I couldn’t stay
I ran away. I wouldn’t believe in what did u say!

 
The weakness in your eyes made me crazy
I looked around to see you beside me
I knew you were not there, you were behind my fear
 
I made up all my dreams, me & you
I thought life would be merry, so I said please don’t worry
Love would break your nightmare
But you didn't believe me, you didn’t feel me
Why? What am I supposed to do?
 
Unfortunately we’re done, go & find another one
Live your life like you didn’t know me before
I knew it was hard but life would give me more
 
So I’ll say goodbye, please baby don’t cry
I will remember you for awhile

Cause you’re not for me from the first hi

Reviews

[Eva warde]

When i wrote about weakness i meant how weak he was when we were in love.
His weakness made me weak all the time and when i needed him i couldn't find him at all.thanks for your comment :)

[Daydreamer54]

Wow, how sad. i don't get the part talking about the weakness.other then that nice write! it's true sometimes we like someone that we are not meant to b with, but there is that special person out there for us! I knew we were wrong..I thought we could be stroge.- u mean strong. also this line reminds me of song... but i can;t think of it! lol! :p

[Eva warde]

thank you silent siren and emma for your reading :) ... sorry emma about the error (strong)i didn't notice that ^_^

[Silent Siren]

"When I saw the weakness in your eyes I couldn’t stay
I ran away. I wouldn’t believe in what did u say!"

I take it you were trying to rhyme these two lines? However, I don't think it sounds right.

Writing "what did you say!" it's doesn't quite work in my opinion...

[emma]

There is real emotion here and you express it well, just a few comments if I may;
Personally I feel the use of & a little distracting and I think you could create more of an impact by using the word. This is just an opinion, feel free to disregard it ;)
Also in the first line, there is a spelling error- 'stroge' should be 'strong'
Overall I thought this was a great write!!