My Kingdom

Watch it burn

 

Synchronized chaos 

A rich bounty

Corruption

Endless desire

Never ending passion

A ruler's sacrifice

The people's revenge

Inflamed

Fury 

Feel his wrath

Ignore his pain

Run

Choose

to live or die

to follow or rebel

Stand together

Hand in hand

Fight, fight till the death

Women and children hidden

Flee

Wait for a miracle

Author's Note

Please inform me of any grammatical errors. Please be brutally honest but not disrespectful

Reviews

[EverEmma]

Thank you very much everyone.

[Short.Nerd]

I love you word choices, this was a very amazing poem.

[Devons]

Like a splash-painting that uses its colour sparingly, this poem distributes words and imagery succinctly across the page, each symbolic of all that is conflict. That is the picture that is produced from the whole conglomeration of the quick-fire wording: like a story-board for a film, it picks out the more potent and salient points that go together to inspire a moving image within the mind's eye. The style is almost jingoistic, proverbial.. evoking little visions or paintings from the minimalist descriptions and imagery. And together they all make up one collage: My Kingdom.
It is not a technique that I usually am receptive to (so often poems such as this end up being too elusive in meaning), but this one works really well.

[Mia]

I agree with Kit Kat, that you had very awesome word choices (I'm feeling that's your specialty;) And I also didn't see any errors at all! Great job, love it!

[deeps]

Stand together
Hand in hand
Fight, fight till the death


Women and children hidden
Flee
Wait for a miracle

Very awesome words here; this is one wonderful write.
I didn't see any errors at all.