bliss point

Blisspoint

 

 

The chemists know it:

a curve on the graph

where sugar sings loudest,

before the tongue grows numb.

The marketers know it:

a dial tuned to craving,

not too much, never too little,

just enough to keep you

coming back for more.

 

And we know it too-

that moment

before laughter becomes hysteria,

before love curdles into need,

before the glass tips

from savour to stupor.

 

The blisspoint,

not paradise, but a razor’s edge:

a sweetness balanced

on the lip of ruin.

 

Step too far,

and the song turns shrill.

Hold steady, and for one breath,

you taste perfection-

then it vanishes,

as all true bliss must.

 

 

 

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Reviews

[carl]

what was the season or so ago and - Lay's chips - "no one can eat just one." the way of temptation just enough to crave but not too much to scare. Very clear description of our role as consumers. Literally that is how we are seen by producers. - carl

[redd Brick Keshner]

“Once you pop you can’t stop” 🕊️🙏🏻

[S€H@J]

Somehow this piece makes me remember the words of dostoevsky "Oh a whole minute of bliss is it to much for the whole of a man's life" From white nights ,Was it your inspiration for this piece?

[redd Brick Keshner]

Not directly, now that you mention it and perhaps subconsciously as I haven’t read Dostoevsky in three decades or so. Thanks for picking up in that🙏🏻🕊️

[Betty Hermelee]

This definitely the peak of bliss… just enough for pure satisfaction… a metaphor for bliss in a sensual way.. just enough to reach the peak… and pure satisfaction!!
Thank you for sharing!
Warmly
B👍

[redd Brick Keshner]

Thanks B, truly appreciated 🙏🏻🕊️

[Betty Hermelee]

My Pleasure
Warmly, B

[LisaCarol]

This poem is wonderfully crafted and one that I will save. A great reminder to us all. Life is blissful, until it isn't. Thanks for sharing your writing.

[redd Brick Keshner]

Thank you so much. It’s always a joy when a poem finds a home. It’s he rest feel like sad little orphans. Much privileged, dear LisaCarol🙏🏻🕊️

[FlatDaddy]

I read through all the reviews/comments that came before me and they are all the same, just different words to describe the same thing -- naturally. That's what we DO here. Sturm und Drang, the essence of life and literature.Our craft is building knotholes, then finding things to pull through them, then finding different ways to describe the building of the knothole and the use of the knothole. Then there are the "Songs of the Knothole," the "Knothole Games," "The Knothole Songs," and so on. They are all here in "The Knothole Books/Jeans/T-Shirts/Board Games/ Stop me, Bricky, before I explode!

[redd Brick Keshner]

Now FD, fodder for more writes popping up like mushrooms when the spores begin to germinate 🙏🏻🕊️

[FlatDaddy]

Go ahead. But I want the credit. And royalties.

[redd Brick Keshner]

Haha, join me in walking about, petrol is so expensive these days $3/litre that’s $11.36 per USGallon!

[FlatDaddy]

Much cheaper here, Bricks. About $4 a gallon.But I haven't gone out today, it could be $8. We're so lucky that we have tRump and Hogsbreathe, making sure prices are kept low.

[redd Brick Keshner]

We’ve got a toothless consumer watchdog rubbing salt on the public’s wounds. 🧂 🩹 🤕

[FlatDaddy]

Welcome to Tomorrowland. Disney would be thrilled at all the new rides. "Mommy, mommy, let's ride the Dow Jones! Wheeee!"

[Chris Shaw]

Perfection is fleeting. Bliss, is a box of my favourite chocolates. Too many and my conscience starts to hurt. Creative work Freds. Hope all is good in your world.

Chris

[redd Brick Keshner]

It’s been a turbulent season hence the protracted absence. Thanks Chris, hopefully back with a modicum of regularity 🙏🏻🕊️

[Chris Shaw]

Turbulence is unsettling. Hope you get a reprieve and better days ahead Freds. All the best.

[redd Brick Keshner]

Thank you, Chris. It does get more tiresome than in younger days. But hope is always with us.🙏🏻🕊️
Freds.

[Rosie C]

Hmm, a pleasant read. Very imaginative.

There is a lot of uplitment throughout this piece.
I admire the delicate flow of each stanza.

Creative choice on words, I particularly liked “razors edge” and “hysteria”.

Wonderful insight. Poetic in its own little ways.

[redd Brick Keshner]

The “little ways” can make it at times. Glad this was one of them. Thanks, Rosie 🕊️🙏🏻

[Curly Grace]

This poem captures that fragile, perfect edge where pleasure peaks before it tips into excess. I love how it moves from science to emotion so seamlessly. The “sweetness balanced on the lip of ruin” is such a precise, gorgeous truth.

[redd Brick Keshner]

Thanks kindly, that calls to mind the idea of living on the edge which is right in the same playing field. Most appreciated 🙏🏻🕊️

[Thomas W Case]

This cuts sharp—sweetness measured, joy fleeting, perfection always on the edge.
Every line hums with the tension between desire and ruin.

[redd Brick Keshner]

Much like the tightrope walk of life🙏🏻🕊️

[Davidgeo]

Is this about the Laffer Curve? I feel like this might be about the Laffer Curve. It's a nice read regardless.

[redd Brick Keshner]

It’s essentially an anthropomorphic , sensory analogue of the Laffer Curve. Both show that value lies in moderation, that the peak of experience or revenue is not at the extremes but in the delicate middle. One speaks in graphs, the other in metaphors—but they are siblings in thought.

[Davidgeo]

Economics vs statistics