Autumn in the Glen

There are showers of leaves within our glen

Because autumn has come upon us

I go there often, each tortuous step

To remember and to imagine

You danced here in exuberant circles

Arms extended, whirling madly

Celebrating who you were in a moment of magic

Before laughing and collapsing upon the leaves

That God had painted for your pleasure

 

You tilted your lips to accept my kiss

And I consumed your beauty, gathering it

Into my soul like the promises of all the gods

And in that moment when your laughter faded

Into the softness of deep wonder

You were more beautiful than all your yesterdays

And birds hushed in worship of you

The breeze surrendered and the clock suspended

Because it was a moment indelible upon itself

 

I pause at the place where you danced

And examine the marvels of the new season

Of how the earth has dressed itself in gaudy colors

And realize that if I were God in constant creation

I would have made you no differently than you were

Nothing would I have changed for I saw you

Only in your perfection while blind to flaw or error

I saw you as the autumn leaf in all its brazen colors

But as I reached for it, the wind blew it away

Reviews

[Cwortknee]

My goodness. Let me just say I don't like long poetry, I often can't keep up.. but you don't lose me once. You paint such a vivid picture, and tell such a beautiful story in each one of your works.
"You were more beautiful than all your yesterdays"
I swooned a little out loud.
That is probably the most charming compliment I have ever heard.
Please don't ever stop writing.
-Courtney

[DrD]

Once again, thank you, Courtney. I love sharing these things with you because your heart is always at home to receive my words. Thank you.

[Audrey Howitt]

What a beautiful write. Well crafted and so full of layers--just beautiful.

[DrD]

I have not seen you here before, Audrey and I want you to know you are always welcome and I will be visiting your work soon.

[Sami Khalil]

I like your poems and style dear fellow poet. You paint a beautiful picture of seasons and emotions.
I like the best:
Into the softness of deep wonder
You were more beautiful than all your yesterdays.

[DrD]

You are always so kind, Sami. Your visits here are always appreciated.

[Sami Khalil]

Smiling. My pleasure.

[Sid]

This is beautiful Dr. amazingly descriptive and greatly poignant, you can paint the most amazing pictures with your words and it's always a treat to read your works. I think you are talking about your wife her and it's mesmerizing that you can remember here with this much love and such lovely emotions..great work!!

[DrD]

Thank you, Sid. Right on all accounts. I appreciate your visit and hope you returns soon.

[Sid]

I sure will! You can give my work a read if you feel like it, it would be much appreciated.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

what we chase and what we catch are often two different things--
the woman we think we see and fall in love with, and then the woman who really exists...we often create a standard way too high for anyone to live up to.
we see perfect, "the leaf in all its brazen colors"...but when we reach for her...
that image blows away...and we are left with a bare tree that disappoints us.

if only as humans, male or female, we wouldn't expect so much from each other...we would be happier with what we have. and we wouldn't always be leaving one for another, thinking the colors are more striking with the next tree.

it's inside beauty that counts...and the perfection is in the imperfection.

a stunning piece here---

jacob

[The_Jabberwock]

Where do I even begin with this...so beautiful. The imagery, the metaphor, the flow, the words...like touching soft skin on an innocent face. This was phenomenal

[DrD]

Thanks Jabberwock, I hope you'll visit again soon.

[Emberlorna]

Ah the magic and romance. This is beautiful in every way. You describe the moment so vividly the imagery flows so colorfully. Very moving. You are so very talented DrD :}

[DrD]

Thank you, Ember. Please visit soon and often.

[Emberlorna]

You're very welcome and I definitely will I really enjoy your poetry :)

[Tarry Franck]

This is so beautiful. Left me wanting more. Flowed beautifully.

[DrD]

I appreciate your comments, Tarry. Please come often.

[Tarry Franck]

It's my pleasure. I will come back often. I'm addicted, I believe :))))

[M.M.I]

I truthfully have no criticism. This made my head spin with all the images you portrayed so delicately. Bravo.

[DrD]

Thanks, M.M.I and I appreciate your visit.

[J.J. NIGHTINGALE]

A tear fell as I read
To be so adored
To be so taken with
A woman ..

No one ever spoke words like this to me
Although I knew I was adored
And more importantly, loved ..

Each line I read touches deep .. and I am so happy to know you ..

Jasmine . xx

[DrD]

So many women live in the thin line between being loved and being wanted. I would never put one there. Thanks, J.

[J.J. NIGHTINGALE]

xx . J