la lune

we went to the store and the moon was so bright it was like the sun. this just started playing in my mine

when the moonlight shines 

like a lamp in the sky

a woman walks pale 

meandering about grass and trees

aimlessly about roads and side walks

when she passes--

sadness follows

like an echo of things lost

pale she walks about

a wraith in the gloom

allure the midnight fall

and come avoid her stare

for anguish comes with it

Author's Note

please comment good or bad I want them!

Reviews

[DeliriousCerises]

I like the imagery, "when she passes -- saddess follows" I just imagine pale ghostly figure walking around in a permanent shadow and flowers/grass/plants temporarily wilting when she come nears, and animals bowing their heads in they happen to fall on her path. It makes me a bit sad, but anyway good job ^^

[paparapapa]

All I can think of is a scary ghost. Haha. But it was great how you described the night. It made me feel like I was the one in there, that's why it gave me goosebumps. Readers can have different interpretations on this poem. Great write. ;)