The walk

An extraordinary finding.

I had gone for a walk. It was a beautiful autumn afternoon and German shepherd puppy followed, very cheerful and playful. When we reached a clearing, the dog stopped as if something or someone had put on guard. Moments later, a groan was heard and then a muffled cry.

My shock was tremendous when behind some bushes I found a baby wrapped in a shawl on a wicker basket. Thinking that maybe its mother was hiding nearby and watch the scene, I tucked her in my arms the baby and wandered around trying to find it.

At a time of the search, the dog stopped again and began barking hard looking in one direction. Nearby, on the floor, she lays a young half-naked woman. She seemed unconscious. I lay the baby down on the ground and tried to find a pulse on her wrist. She was dead.

After thirty years, that child is married and has two children who call me grandfather. I have never said that he is not my son.

Reviews

[Shannon]

Interesting read, took a turn for the unexpected rather rapidly.
Are you interested in feedback about word usage?

[Francisco]

Thank you very much.
I am interested in your feedback about word usage. Thank you.

[Shannon]

ok, some suggestions:
...and the German Shepard puppy followed, very...
...trying to find her...
...nearby on the forest floor...
I lay the baby down on the ground...

I also wonder why use "she" for baby?

Is any of that helpful?

[Francisco]

Thank you so much. You are very kind. I will edit the writing and I will make the changes you have suggested.
Would I change "she" by "it"?
Thank you very much.

[Shannon]

Yes. She makes much more sense, as you are not aware that you are looking for a body yet!

[Francisco]

Yes. Of course. You are right. Thank you very muc for your help.

[Shannon]

No problem. I am always happy to help. If you have specific questions, feel free to message me, as well!

[Francisco]

Thank you S. Mi.