Fire, Flame and Ember

A new age, pagan influenced poem about my feelings towards fire and how it moves me.

I sit and watch the flames, dancing before my eyes

The flickering light is hypnotising, true beauty to behold

I feel the fire entering my being, filling me, body and soul

Fire, flame and ember

I feel your spirits here

Fire, flame and ember

I dance with thee tonight

And now I rise to join, your power pulls me in

Within this Sacred Grove I find, my element inside

I absorb the wild energy, and fall in step with you

Fire, flame and ember

I feel your spirits here

Fire, flame and ember

I dance with thee tonight

And your Spirit fills me now, I sparkle with your light

O we move as one true entity, and there is no way to tell

Where I end and You begin

As the flames begin to quell, a stillness fills the air

I lay me down by your side, and watch the embers glow

And now the dreaming ensues, the dance begins again

Fire, flame and ember

I feel your spirits here

Fire, flame and ember

I dance with thee tonight

Reviews

[patricia]

I liked this, especially the repeated chorus, it became hypnotic as I read on. Thanks.

[Aurora Lynn]

Great poem! I really like your style of poetry! I especially like how you repeated the stanza 'Fire, flame and ember/I feel your spirits here/Fire, flame and ember/I dance with thee tonight'.

Just one suggestion. On your other stanzas, you might want to break them up a little bit. As an example, I would suggest that instead of writing:

'I sit and watch the flames, dancing before my eyes'

That you write:

'I sit and watch the flames,
dancing before my eyes'

It just makes the pause more dramatic and helps it flow more. Other than that, this was a really good piece! Thank you for writing and welcome to the Cafe!

~Aurora