Been better, Been worse.

Been better, been worse,

Is what she always says.

When you look inot her eyes,

She's somewhere out of space.

 

She doesn't like to face

The facts she must admit

But locks herself into her world

Remembering not a bit.

 

Been better, been worse,

The meaning of the phrase?

Life has hit so low before

But she's had better days.

 

She laughed and smiled

Through fields of green,

She's been in tears

The reason's obscene.

 

Been better, been worse,

She will live like this

For the rest of her life,

In neutral bliss.

Author's Note

I always say 'been better, been worse' if I'm having a bad day, so I thought a decent poem could be made of it :)

Hope it's okay x

Reviews

[Matthew vonHone]

I thought you might be writing this poem about someone I know. Seems a common phrase. I loved it ... added it to my bookshelf. Nice work.

[Veronica Chandler]

This one is pretty awsome, and I think our days, even the seemingly smallest little things in them, make some of the best poems.

[StarSandwich]

Hehehe, :D Totally understand where your coming from

[Joshua J. Certain]

A familiar feeling we have all seen these days, where everything lies in between I call them my blah days, you captured it perfect with your words

[AndyJCash]

I like poems that do this: take a simple saying that could be heard everyday and exploring it deeper, getting to the real meaning of it. A nice write, great rhyming scheme!

[roy mccarthy]

i like it,
it flows well,
the last staza is awesome!

[Chris Smith Welshpoetcs]

We hide our feelings, this poem is good reflection of that my friend.

[realmwriter]

And a decent poem you have made of it. I say that a lot myself, but I say been worse been better. I say it on good days! been worse, been better. Today all is better cause I read A really cool poem, well written and flowed nicely. I loved it, Thank you!

[Enjoy]

sidenote: I like that you're actually willing to admit that you're not exactly having the best day, makes things easier to understand for dumb guys like myself :D

ontopic: I'm not entirely sure the word obscene is what you're looking for, I feel like obscure is more where you're going with it, but I might be wrong! I also feel like you're altering the flow of the poem to force it to rhyme, which creates awkward moments in the phrasing. Otherwise, I enjoy the content itself quite a bit, and the phrase "neutral bliss" is quite endearing. I enjoyed it. Keep it up!

[A Risen Heroine.]

"Been better, been worse,
She will live like this
For the rest of her life,
In neautral bliss."

I really love that stanza!
Thanks for sharing such a nice piece and keep up the good work.

~A Fallen Heroine~