I'm a Fool

Short, sweet & to the point

You played me like a card
I should have expected less
Should never lower my guard
How could you be so selfish?

 

Thought I was the one and only
object of your affection
But the cruel reality is,
I'm one of many dying for your attention

 

How could I be so blind?
How could I beleive it true
Honesty is so hard to find
Thought you wanted that too

 

So once again I pick my heart up
Off the dusty dirty floor
Empty is my cup
Tired of trying to find more

 

Do I look like a fool?
You know I've been played in the past
Left drowning in life's pool
Knew it was too good to last

 

The page wiped clean
Back to numb
Nothing suprising
I'm the one that's dumb
 

Reviews

[Ray Hamilton]

We all feel like fools after it's over and we realize we have been used
Both men and women get used by people that wouldn't know love
if it bit them on the you know what
Well penned
Ray

[robin]

You write well with the figurative words and yet I find your point of view very clear within them. Your metaphor does not lead us too far astray and the read is still personal and compelling. Great job! The last part is contrasted with the rest, the writer of this is not "dumb"...odd but still effective, like you continue to take a one down after you've been sucker punched...

[Not Afraid of Bruises]

In the first stanza - I know what you are saying, but you might want to clarify line three.

Other than that, I see nothing else that you might wish to change. The flow works very well throughout the piece and your use of punctuation doesn't hinder the reader. Well written, thanks for sharing :)

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This sounds like lyrics to a song! Good write. I like the image about picking your heart up off the floor. That is great.