Syncopation

I think it's crap... y'all judge please.

Jammin’ sing-song

Syncopation

Dancin’ so long

Exhalation

 

Free wind breezin’

Cool correction

Prospect seizin’

Brief connection

 

Wandrin’ gypsy

Jubilation

Condescension

Marks a nation

 

Ragamuffin

Stands bemused

What’s the weapon

That was used

 

Made heartbeat

Go pitter-patter

Left insane

The town Mad-Hatter

 

Stop this train

I need to leave

Time is closing

Must believe

 

One way up

Many down

Embrace the truth

Embrace the truth…

 

                Embrace the truth,

 

Heaven bound

 

Reviews

[Leah Simone]

love the riff and the jazz undercurrent that pulls you through this one - wasn't expecting the almost spiritual ending, but it works - good job!

[vanishing]

I really thought the form
is subtle in a brilliant way
as each sentence completes
a singular thought
adding to the entire structure
What I like is the way you took a jamboree
emotion and entwined it into metaphor
to reflect todays time
and warring events
le' exceptional writng
thanks for sharing