Wind

short and made in 2-3 minutes

Simply sitting still,

Listening and looking around,

And all is quiet.

 

Trickling a breeze,

Waking up to walk about,

The softest whispers.

 

Running through the air,

Speaking with a loud, firm voice,

Singing with power.

Reviews

[Nigasa]

I like the contrast: quiet at the start, then ends with "loud, firm voice." You've ANIMATED wind, like it has soul and a heartbeat. Wonderful, Sabrina!

[Kayla]

This poem doesn't need to be long becuase it has everythign a poem needs in one. Life, movement, sounds, feelings. You did a wonderful job. This poem I found so interesting becuase I never thought a poem so small could be so intense. Great write!

[gemma]

i like this poem the simpilicty of the writing is beautiful but there is more to that simplicity than there really is shown you should alwasy write like this its very very pretty and has soul and a personality to it

[Deseret]

it is very good for two or three minutes :-)

[Justin Tobey]

A great set of haikus! I love the the line "Singing with power." I think the idea that something could sing with power is quite interesting, and it's a good description. : )