Such and When.

 

 

Such and When.

 

Such a morning when sun warms the puddles 
for sparrows to bathe.
When rabbits in early ablutions raise fluffy
paws with cautious flair.
Such a whisper as dew-bent meadow grass 
stiffens to upright again.
When leaves shiver in autumnal colour as 
easterly ruffles gold hair.

 

Such lucid dawn calm misting walled water as
harboured boats chafe .
When kettles on hobs whistle duets with sizzle 
of frying-pan fare.
When laggards leave beds for breakfast aroma 
yet leaving it late.
Such cladding with oil-skins for battling oceans 
to catch silver share.

 

Such village kerfuffle as dawn crosses cobbles
with work in its wake.
When ladish the laughter as fishing nets tangle 
how blessed such a day.

Reviews

[emmajoy]

' Such lucid dawn calm misting walled water as - harboured boats chafe . - When kettles on hobs whistle duets with sizzle - of frying-pan fare.'

Years ago I signed a petition on behalf of fishermen's rights in Cornwall.. your wonderfully created poem reminds me of how it was and can be in a fishing community. Faye, you've clearly contrived a series of miniature happenings which finish as a superb canvas of real life, morning on. The fishing industry is a painful one that goes back in distant past history, you've honoured both its domestic and work-wise reality so accurately

[Fay Slimm]

I am so pleased you were reminded of things close to your heart by this read dear emma - and my sincere thanks for your visit to read and review my humble tribute to those whose living is brought by facing the vagaries of weather and oceans.

[emmajoy]

Live in Dorset, but love Cornwall almost but not quite. MORE! Your poem is very clear visually, you know.. read it three times and could see what you'd written so easily even though you use poetic form so well.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Wonderful imagery and alliteration make for a really peaceful read....one that takes us away from the harsh realities of today's world full of so much anger and hate.
nicely done.
j.

[Fay Slimm]

Your visit and review is much appreciated jacob -I am so pleased you enjoyed the read.

[Stella Armour]

How blessed indeed my dear Friend!
Your poetry is always certain to take me somewhere i would like to be :)
Beautiful imagery portrayed Fay ..... but that is a family trait for you as well i know .....

[Fay Slimm]

Your review is most welcome dear Stella and thank you for reading the small tribute to those making a modest living from the vastly erratic ocean.

[Lydia Shutter]

This one touches on all the senses. I felt as though I was walking through a fishing village as I read your colorful words. I could feel the breeze and hear the laughter. Just wonderful! Lydi**

[Fay Slimm]

So pleased you enjoyed the read Lydia -- thanks ever so for your visit and lovely review.

[Neville]

the perfect picture of a Cornish coastal village waking up to a new day.............

lovely tis too....... Neville

[Fay Slimm]

Double helping of thanks for my effort of Such and When in a waking village where fish bring in their living................ bless ya my friend.

[Neville]

.................. N :) ing and a pleasure too..