Stuck

First poem! I won't reveal too much. I've been having worrying thoughts for the past while and it's got to the point where I feel stuck with no solution.

I look as though I don't care.
Deep down I am bloody scared.
There's a wall only I can feel.
Inside my head but you can't see.
I have to be strong for everyone.
I can't show that there's something wrong.
I'm seeing everything in low lights.
But I have to look like I'm shining bright.
I have to keep everyone happy.
I don't know how to look after me.

I can't smash the wall down.
Believe me I've tried.
I've tried to make a lot of sound.
Nobody can hear it.
I've tried to run far away.
Someone always catches me.
I don't think I want to stay.
Someone locks the door.

I want to run away where nobody knows me.
I don't want any help even if I'm wrong.
A place where the people are happy and free.
And there are no troubles. Everyone gets along.

Reviews

[KurKota]

I like this. It is very expressive of your inner feelings, in a manner that is unique. Although the content of this excellent, I am a bit unsettled with the structure. I happen to be somewhat of a traditionalist in rhynme, cadence, etc. Therefore, the variance in number of lines in the 3 stanzas, etc. seem contrary to me, but that is likely just me. Good job !

[Michelle]

Thanks for the review! I'm not really one for thinking about structure. I write a lot of my poems in the wee small hours when I am tired or feeling emotional. Therefore the structure is the last thing on my mind! I don't see my emotions as being structured and that is reflected in how I write. I hope you see what I mean. It sounded better in my head! :D

I will try and structure my poems when I have more time during the day! We don't learn about poetry in my school so advice on this is greatly appreciated!

[KurKota]

I understand where you are coming from ....just a difference in perspective. Enjoy your writing .

[Isabelle Howard]

This is my life in a poem. You are amazing.

[Michelle]

Thank you so much! Really means a lot! :)

[Isabelle Howard]

Welcome :)
Anytime.