Spirits

First poem I wrote. Most likely will be edited some day, but it's perfect for now.

Fire burns and winds blow strong
Telling what is right from wrong
And as I wait for death
I lay my weary head to rest
And so I will live on
With the spirits that are gone
And though you call my name
I sadly never came

Reviews

[L. C. Rhodes]

Reminds me of the ghost dances of the Native Americans. Beautifully arranged and invokes some pretty strong imagery. You might want to look at the tenses on the last two lines. That's pretty much it.

[lissalovesyou]

FIRST poem?
Wow. I wish my first poem sounded just as good.
Added to favs.
lissalovesyou:)

[FireFox9]

Thanks but no doubt yours was pretty good as well. Mine is just average compared to what others have done. Thanks though Fox-

[Sibusiso Xtdo Gama]

wonderful....

Fire burns and winds blow strong
Telling what is right from wrong( that is life for you.) you are the best

[MAD ENGLISHMAN]

A very expressive piece.
Insightful.

[Mike Sieger]

I can't believe that this is your first poem you ever wrote, it is incredibly deep and truly touches the soul. Well done!