Tick Tock

Poetic escape

Warm beckoning sun in the sky
Birdsong and traffic filling the air
While trapped in the house, I longingly sigh
Desiring to be running free out there

So much to do and limited time
My research project calling for me
All I can do is escape in rhythm and rhyme
Wishing I was by the river hugging a tree

Striving for balance between freedom and passion
Multiple viewpoints tumbling around in my head
A graduate proposal to carefully fashion
To the insulting clock I am currently wed

Reviews

[MAD ENGLISHMAN]

I know the feeling well. Most of my life is taken up doing the mundane. I CAN escape now and then. I go for long walks across the fields and I've fallen into a river a couple of times. The need for freedom from the world around us not something you suffer alone. You'd be surprised how many of us are out there.
Another nice write. very true and telling. Good descriptions too.

[Madalyn Beck]

To be a slave to time that never wanes. Beautiful.

[FlamingPhoenix]

Indeed...thank you for your review!

[Kleio13]

This makes me feel like where I am right now. In Limbo with myself because of the viewpoints that I am surrounded by , the many things that i want to accomplish, and how i love poetry. Great work once again.

K

[FlamingPhoenix]

Thank you. I'm glad you could relate!

[Kleio13]

Me too! Your welcome

[A. Amos]

Wow my friend, this is brilliant..

[FlamingPhoenix]

Aw, thanks!

[Bluefire]

Slave to the clock and the passing of time.
Well played. ^^

[FlamingPhoenix]

Slave to the clock indeed, as well as to my academic passion! Thank you for your review :-D

[Bluefire]

You're welcome. ^^

[s y e]

// To the insulting clock I am currently wed //

This made the poem, perfection is on my screen right now FP. Nothing more I can say.

[FlamingPhoenix]

Aw! Thank you for such a kind review!!!

[Savannah Bly]

I think that this is how many college students feel in general (you made it you of course). A very relatable piece as we are ending another school year! Well done phoenix! :)

[FlamingPhoenix]

Yes, I'm sure many can relate! A temporary sacrifice for a long-term gain!

[Lyn Anderson]

The last line makes the poem. The pressure, the anxiety, the oft perceived futility of it all -- all aptly expressed in this piece.

[FlamingPhoenix]

Thanks so much!

[melissa]

This is awesome poem keep up the great work i can't wait to read more

[FlamingPhoenix]

:-) thanks!

[melissa]

You're welcome