Nothing and Never

I just felt so empty inside

There is a space where something should be,

or someone,

that is so void of all things and color-

that smell-

that nothing could ever fill it again.

That space

which can never, ever, be filled again

lies here,

in my sinking heart, gaping, burning

with rage.

Reviews

[Ken e Bujold]

I really enjoyed this read Dominik. Great flow, terrific grasp of the form and imagery.

One minor quibble, or not really a quibble just a thought: the line "that nothing could ever fill it again" reads just a tad chunky. A possible change, which to my ear, would add more power to the line is to x out it and insert good after nothing...that nothing good could ever fill again...keeps meter and rhyme but would signify much more of the emptiness you seem to be striving for

Ken e