Oh, Butterflies

Belly full of butterflies...

A million and one

butterflies                      fluttering around

           wings flapping

       hundreds per second

I'm queasy

from the flittering

continuous                  circles they're making

 inside me

               my nervous belly

Oh, the things
                         that you do to me.

Reviews

[alesuriko]

Very cute and sweet this poem is! I love the structure and the accompanying picture, very suiting. It has such a flippant and whimsical atmosphere about it, as though you're floating and bouncing around the poem while reading it which is thoroughly enjoyable. Well written!

[JanieB]

I really love the way you have set the text to resemble fluttering butterflies. Good job.

[Zeitgeist Manifesto]

Behold the Magnificent power of love.
This was absolutely beautiful.

[Alicia Schroeder]

This is sweet

[Nimbus Thread]

A creative flutter of emotions and whimsy. Very sweet.

[Michael X]

beautiful, and well written artistic, and the form creates the feelling imo,
the fluttering effect, the imesg of butterflies play well into the romantic
theme as well as the classic emotion of nervousness in such ways
the reader can't help but feel the excited emotional implication
and the over design, brilliantly conceptualized work, keep it up!

[Aven]

happiness washes over me ! :)

[.]

oh that feeling! Whether from love or lust or sheer nervousness..they are always there...nicely done

[Blossom]

I like the written format of this poem. its really cute and sweet. love the last line.

[JelliFyshKissUs]

Aw... so cute and sweet. I would switch flittering continuous to continuous flittering, unless you were going for an unbalanced affect to explain the butterflies in your stomach.