Fotuna

The Goddess Of Fortune

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Goddess Fortuna dance around me in your circle of happiness.

Allow me to indulge in gold and sapphire.

Your raven hair slipped my lips and caress my desire.

I fell in love with Goddess Fortuna in the circle of happiness

 

Reviews

[krish]

This is too short,but i like ur's word's.......
the line that i damn loved is ........"I FELL IN LOVE WITH GODDNESS FORTUNA,
IN THE CIRCLE OF HAPPINESS............"!!
& i loved it coz........ur's overall poem show's the mirror of FORTUNA...
but if i'd suggestion to give u my opinion.........then i'd say that u should have to write on it some more............coz....the fortuna contain's lot's of happiness..& u've to write on it......thereby ..........everyfella cou;ld know that what's a fortuna.....u've to convert'the reality of fortuna into ur's poetric word's................
anyway ............i liked + loved = enjoyed/........
so i wanna give u 81/100........
carry-on..........have a cheerful-day......
may god bless u...............


#"$hivam....!!"

[Ana Drake]

Wish it was longer,but still beautiful :)

[Renderess Of Skies]

To all reviewers, the idea of lust was found everywhere in ancient Greece, the number of child Zeus had only adds on

[Daniel Eckert]

A very interesting piece. I like the line, "Your raven hair slipped my lips and caress my desire." It is very sensual and vivid. Thank you for sharing the great piece!

[Emily Dickinson Jr.]

I dont know for some reason I think this reads a bit like a letter so maybe itd make more sense if you formatted it like that ya know?

[Emily Dickinson Jr.]

oh and also you changed from past and present a bit so thats kinda distracting ut overall a very good little poem you have here

[Writer #00]

"Goddess Fortuna dance around me in your circle of happiness."
It almost seems as if the "me" in this poem only feels happiness if the goddess herself brings it to "me". A lovely portrait of human lust from a newly divine perspective.

[Imagine Blade]

Very nice and quite pleasing to the eyes. The layout is subtle but incredibly suited to what is written. Who wouldn't like to read a little about Gods and Goddesses?

Indeed. Very GREEKY!
Hahahha.

[Sarah Ramsbottom]

this is beautiful. very old greek

[Renderess Of Skies]

Thank you all for the reviews

[Hanakuso]

This is beautiful. I love the simplicity - it speaks eons of praise.