Event Horizon~flirting with oblivion~A Poem by Fran MarieA Collaboration by Fran Marie and A.J. Smith
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Another great collaboration from you two! I love the title and the epigraph -- event horizon and black hole indeed. Wow!
As a reader, I found myself wondering one thing: do the people feel the oblivion spoken of in the epigraph, or is that a narrator's POV? Either way, while the poem left me wanting to know what comes next (WILL there be a Part Deux???), I think I would've liked a referral back to the epigraph somehow. One or two lines from the narrator/italicized POV, perhaps, or a comment from one or both of the poets. But not too much, and it's just a thought! The unknown of what's next is an essential part of that event horizon and the appeal of the poem! Thanks for sharing and good job! Posted 17 Years Ago2 of 2 people found this review constructive. |
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Wonderful job. I really liked this and I loved the allusion to a black hole. Captured. Entranced. Consumed.
Highest marks! Very best regards, Rick Posted 9 Years Ago |
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I read this before & still think it is great!!
Posted 17 Years Ago2 of 2 people found this review constructive. |
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Wonderful story of forbidden passion... Excelent read thanks for sharing!
~Frances~ Posted 17 Years Ago2 of 2 people found this review constructive. |
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Nice!
A wonderful piece, really, really well written and structured. Its a beautiful story you tell, pushing it from one extreme of feeling to the other. Well done to the both of you for a great piece of work! Posted 17 Years Ago2 of 2 people found this review constructive. |
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what a beautiful creations..
from one extreme .. black hole.. lost soul.. wandering aimlessly without roots... in a suspended animation... the first two paragragphs... taking you.. to total completeness.. fulfulling life.. bravo.. pal Posted 17 Years Ago2 of 2 people found this review constructive. |
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This is a beautiful meeting of souls, very well written.
Posted 17 Years Ago2 of 2 people found this review constructive. |
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awsome collab... writing styles match perfect. Well done guys! Always a pleasure to read your work..
Posted 17 Years Ago2 of 2 people found this review constructive. |
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Amazing how well you pulled this together. Made it real!
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Excellent write and joint effort. I agree to everyone's suggestion that the flow and imagery were well noted. Great Write!!! Keep em coming!
Dostani Posted 17 Years Ago2 of 2 people found this review constructive. |
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Last Updated on February 26, 2008


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