lost at sunset

senryu

          Dancing in shadows

 a dark moon follows each step

          in mid-tempo blues

Reviews

[Einstein Noodle]

don't miss the Blue moon coming up on the 22nd. ;) it rises at dusk in the SE sky. :)) i picture a melancholy figure walking alone .. along some shore or big water ... your senryu inspires with motion, setting, scene and music ... a lot to pack into such a small form... enjoyed the experience Fran. thanks for sharing!
E.

[Fran Marie]

Hi E ..thanks for stopping by.
and the great review ..glad
for your thoughts on this one
I so appreciate;

[jacob erin-cilberto]

"blue moon, you saw me standing alone without a love of my own"
or you did see a love, and were the voyeur...

playing the sax and watching us dance.

[Fran Marie]

"without a dream in my heart
without a love of my own.".

probably be watching for the blue
moon Mr.E mentioned on Aug 22nd
thanks Jacob

[Poetic Beauty]

Walking on a warm summer night with a heavy heart is what this poem reminds me of.

[Fran Marie]

Thanks PB ..yep a sad blusey
senryu is what I was aiming for

[Poetic Beauty]

You achieved that quite well

[Carlos Lorenzo Estrada]

Both the title and words are very striking and draw in the reader. This senryu has a very dream like quality with the painted images it conveys. Very nice work Fran.

[Fran Marie]

Thanks Carlos for your kind review
I always welcome your kind words
on my poetry ..i do appreciate;