Mobius

 

Theres no beginning
 
    never an end as it seems
 
                   a mobius course

 
 
along the surface
 
  which I transverse passing thru~
 
           this continued path

 
 
infinity's sync
 
   repeating karma's journey
 
                  for all I survey

 
 
drawn to the edge of
 
   sane simplicity,only 
           
              to return once more
 
 
 
 

Reviews

[Clockwork]

This is one of my favorites from you so far. The balance of your lines is sharp, and their measure is sharper still. This piece has a good deal of spirit within it that stretches out against the walls of reality and tests the boundaries. This is good art.

[Carla]

This poem is so capturing of the thought of life going around and around in circles. It inspires me, so well done!

[Fran Marie]

Thanks Carla, so much for reading ..I'm glad you liked it..

[Tina Kline]

A very creative and impressive poem. The unending journey.....a trap or something to be desired.

[Taji Herbert]

This poem was very well written, it flowed well and had in my opinion several hard hitting stanzas great job!

[quinfinn]

beautifully worded and filled with metaphorical imagery, it truly sings to me.
very nice!

[James Paulin]

I love the concept and your depiction is so concise with each word so well selected. I wish you would read one similar poem of mine titled "Double Helix"

[Coyote Poetry]

The haiku flow together create a powerful poem. I believe in the word Karma. What we do in a life will come back to us in the good or the bad deeds. Life is a simple movement. We are here to create life and take care of each other. I like this poem. Made me think. Your words always awake my tire mind. A excellent poem.
Coyote

[Marie Anzalone]

There was something about the metered infinity of this piece that I just loved- and that's really all I can say. It just simply works.. and for that alone, it left an impression on me.

[Sean M. Addams]

this piece is amazing ... i think this is the best haiku piece i've read in a long time... nice job on this..

[Touché Armada]

Nice one Fran, it's got the same movement as the picture you chose which reminds me of what a system of highways might look like if they were never ever torn down but layered over and over, over hunderds of years.