Cloud

a poem about a cloud :) (creative writing class assignment)

The fluffy, black cloud sounds like

God's empty stomach,

with angry rumbling.

The big, cumulus

cloud, when an airplane cuts through

its fluffiness, sounds like the wild

roar of a jungle cat, his prey locked in his eyes.

The cumulus cloud turns bright,

and rimmed with gold, it's soft and wide,

bumping off its brothers, in the bright sunlight.

Reviews

[Coffee Vampier]

Very good poem :) haha this part pulled me in

The fluffy, black cloud sounds like
God's empty stomach,

[Sujash I. Purna]

wonderful work! I really have to know if a pilot really tears apart the stomach of a cloud with their aircraft! :D
Beautiful imagery! "its fluffiness, sounds like the wild roar of a jungle cat" amazing!

[Erinne S.]

This was beautiful! I love watching the clouds and the descriptiveness in this definitely made me feel as if I were looking right at it. Great job!

~Erinne

[An owl on the moon]

I could see and hear it all moving around me... Love looking at clouds, their form and flow through the air... This was a unique glance into the sky!

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

There has been many takes on rain but I really like your thoughts on it's partner in crime. A little poem full of big thoughts.

[Coyote Poetry]

Nothing as peaceful as watching the cloud move. I like this poem. The description made your words come alive. A excellent poem.
Coyote

[Ed Hart]

what a nice picture you have painted here...fine brush strokes...

[Miss Coral]

I love this!
While descriptive and quite pretty, it seems playful at the same time. The flowing rhythm only adds to.
The first simile was awesome. :)

Great job!!