waters of the heart

There’s so much space 

I feel so out of place 

Theirs darkness in my heart 

I wish that was only part 

I don’t know were to go 

When I have sunk this low 

Maybe I should go down?

So that I can drown 

This is all because i tried to sail

But could their more to this tale?

Reviews

[Mazie Tackett]

cool

[myrto]

I like the overall message of this piece but I feel the meter/rhyming scheme is slightly too monotonous, I think being more adventurous in future will really bring your work to life.