Eyes Like The Moon

Vacant stares,
With eyes like the moon.
Wandering lonely as a cloud.
Hands stuffed in pockets,
Covering any trace of sadness.

Incapable of making alright decisions
And having bad ideas.
Just looking for some answers,
In a world that answers none of them at all.
With a life time of crushed and broken dreams.

Reviews

[Jamie]

Such a fantastic write and the title is a work of genius :) Great job!

[Rossen]

Words just fall into the perfect place effortlessly it seems...
well done Gabrielle, 100/100


Rossen

[ANM]

Nicely written conveys the feeling.....

[Priscilla Nishi]

"just looking for some answers,
In a world that answers none of them at all."
love those lines

[Sloth]

This is beautiful. I love the flow of the words, i dont know if its just the way i read it, or the way the words are placed. I just find it very rad.

[Glen Yumang Manese]

Usually the moon theme is done differently ---
yet you do this verse in a depressive state of mind...
as one of your tag lines says so...
I do feel the emotions rendered in the lines....
in the way you give the scenery of this write...
but I would give this a bit more --- in the mood of its presentation:

Vacant stares,
With eyes like the moon.
Wandering lonely as a cloud.
Hands stuffed in pockets,
Covering any trace of sadness.

Incapable of making alright decisions
And having bad ideas.
Just looking for some answers,
In a world that answers none of them at all.
With a life time of crushed and broken dreams.
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Vacant stares on,
With eyes like dark-side of the moon.
Wandering lonely as a storm cloud.
Hands stuffed in empty pockets,
Covering any trace of sadness.

Incapable of making alright decisions
And having intentions of bad ideas.
Just looking for some answers,
In a world that gives none of them at all.
With a life time of crushed and broken dreams.

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this is mere observation --- and a suggestion...and IMPO...this is your work...