ICU

Iris blue latex fingers prompt
Clear plastic snakes past
Flushed haunting lips pursed
In surprise at the smell of deadly sterility
Guardians screech of change-
The lament of mechanical birds
Wheezing pumps urge the
Expansion of exhausted lungs-
Legs straining with the effort
Murmured voices worry above pale ears
Hand limply placed across golden fur
Of the loyal toy bear-
Brown glass eyes the embodiment
Of hopeful innocence

Reviews

[Elaenor Aisling]

Moving, lyrical and truly a stunning piece. Good work!

[Celestial Witch Child]

Thank you very much. (:

[Baby Ricochet]

Good descriptive poem of an ICU. Great job

[Celestial Witch Child]

Thanks.

[Neville]

Newspaper Skeleton, you should be very proud of this work - the smell of dettol makes my eyes water. All Good things, N

[Celestial Witch Child]

Thank you.

[MoriartyMesa]

Taking the normal everyday ICU, than slamming the poetic emotion into this make this not only visual but almost mythology of our hospitals.


Nice.

[afra]

deep and powerful ...great write keep it up

[Owlgirl]

Wow! Powerful, haunting, and very well written. The use of vocabulary is excellent, I love it!

[Barbara Walker]

These words brought me back, sharply, to my experience in the ICU, as a patient. This rang with a deadly emotionalism. Great poem!

[SlightlyOdd]

This poem makes me sad i love the description in this

[Talismanic]

perfet atmosphere, it's ironically suffocating and... disturbing...
i like it :)

[CH Archive]

very descriptive and very well written! my favoriete line has to be "the lament of mechanical birds, wheexing pumps urge the expansion of exhausted lungs". It really says the mood of the poem. I enjoyed the read alot :) thank you