Story of a pal

please, please, please go and kick this society for its sheer prejudices...be free and do what you want to

A story of one pal

His name was Todd

He bled to save the war

And died doing crawl

A story of one pal…

He was a cow’s friend

So simple and so straight

He made compromises

Ignored blood n stitches

He was a cow instead

A story of one pal…

Then he got a job

To feed his know-all

To give ‘em everything

And bless his soul

A story of one pal….

But as he never knew

He perished in a crew

Where ‘competition’ is called ‘collaboration’

And money is your ‘motivation’

It killed his morale

A story of one pal…

He saw ‘em putting heart

In things beyond wall

He saw ‘em dying

Eating pizzas and (client) call

But he couldn’t resist

His own withdrawal

A story of one pal…

One day as he looked

He found himself

Shouting………

On children and their acts

He wept in alone

And wrapped his shawl

To mourn the story of one pal

Reviews

[Dayran]

I find it strange that you observed what your pal was doing but didn't move to help him. A different philosophy? What it might mean is that your friendship killed him. To move in the world he needs to be free and unencumbered from a moral philosophy ... but learning to do things smart. A great poem about friendships especially by those who treasure it highly.

[Gaurav]

Thank you so much sir for your abstract review. Seriously, it is one of the best and honest i got so for. Appreciate it. The pal, sir, is myself only. And you are right, i am not helping him.

[Riddhi]

Very nice poem..You always carve your feeling in a great way...Thanks for sharing...Keep it up....

[Gaurav]

Thankyou Riddhi for your kind words. Appreciate it.

[Romalina]

definitely intriguing words :) you always weave your emotions very well with your words penning it down with an extremely good flow :)
Good Work!! Keep Writing!!

[Gaurav]

Thankyou so much for your kind words. Appreciate it.

[zunie frost]

true words !!!!
your writing are really good . words are perfectly chosen !!!
well done

[Gaurav]

Thank you for taking time out to review the poem :)

[zunie frost]

WELCOME !!!!!

[sansrity sinha]

strong and powerful message depicting reality today! great effort!

[Gaurav]

Thankyou for your kind words :)

[Gaurav]

Your review comments are above ;)

[zunie frost]

OMG !!!! I AM SO SORRY !!!!!

[Gaurav]

Haha...again i respect the intentions :)

[zunie frost]

thanks for that !!!!!

[Chris]

strong thoughts... and yet good wishes.

[Gaurav]

Thank you chris for taking out time to read. Means a lot :)

[Willard Wells]

Money drive the world and once your in the grind of the world for the money it is never ending and hard to escape. I lived that world and escaped to a simple life.

Well penned words of burning out pushing yourself.

[Gaurav]

Thank you for understanding the concept Sir. I am still trapped by the way. Will need your guidance :)

[Jyoti_Ablaze]

The message is strong and moving.
I liked the flow and the gradual pace of it.

In today's world, competition kills more people than any form of crime does.

Very well voiced and penned.

[Gaurav]

Thank you Jyoti :)

Your words are my motivation. Thanks :)

[Jyoti_Ablaze]

You are welcome.