Journey

with expert advice and much-needed editing by Jyoti...

A walk to the Sun

begins with a step,

holding hands of rays

speaking your desires..

The road emanates from spectrum

some visible, some invisible,

don't see through eyes

let the soul reflect...

Dimensions end where

you take a turn,

to become powerful,

choose to rise or fall..

Galaxies bathe in you 

in a whirlpool of novae,

smile and sadness collide

to make you the Sun.....your destination.

Reviews

[Knight Writer]

good thoughts.. never thought about such a version of the journey ahead.....loved it!!!!

[Gaurav]

Thankyou for your kind words brother. Appreciate it.

[Knight Writer]

YOU ARE MOST WELCOME!!!

[Alias]

Gorgeous language, so eloquent and pretty. And reads effortlessly smoothly - very good!

[Gaurav]

Thankyou so much for your kind words. Appreciate it a lot.

[nupur chauhan]

nice one ..like it.... n journey toh vese bhi hoti hi intresting he... keep it up

[Gaurav]

Thanks Nupur for your kind words. Appreciate it.

[nupur chauhan]

Urs most welcome

[zunie frost]

wow !!!!!such a beautiful journey !!! love this !!!!
outstanding words !!!!
Galaxies bathe in you
in a whirlpool of novae,
smile and sadness collide
to make you the Sun.....your destination.

[Gaurav]

Thank you so much for your kind words. Appreciate it.

[zunie frost]

welcome !!!!!

[Kirty labra]

very beautiful, i just wish it had a rhyming scheme, sorry i just like rhyming poems more :)

[Gaurav]

haha...yeah i'll try writing something in rhyme...never give it a thought..thankyou for your feedback..appreciate it

[Alisa Js]

Very lovely piece. Keep up the good work.

Much enjoyed by this reader.

Aloha,

Alisa💫

[Gaurav]

Thank you for your kind words. Appreciate it.

[Arshia]

I really liked the flow of your poem..and the associated depth with every line. Great write! :)

[Gaurav]

Thank you so much for the review. Appreciate it.

[Boca Best Cleaners]

Very nice, this inspires thought. Thank you for sharing

[Gaurav]

Thankyou for kind words. Appreciate it.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

there are many ways to get there...and each is interesting in its own way.

j.

[Gaurav]

Yes sir totally agree. Even the thought of it is equally interesting. Thankyou for the review. Appreciate it.

[hisyam]

Wow... it really mean...ha ha ha.... I like the flow.. nice idea and it also well penned... you've done a great job.... thanks for posting this...

[Gaurav]

Really appreciate your review on this. Thankyou for positive feedback.