He needs Love

When i wake up

and see a night approaching,

i cry..

something out there

push me to bed,

i don't want nightmares...

Walking with you

to a certain distance

and returning home

- a dream once i saw..

something out there

remove the surface from earth

i don't want sky

'cause i will walk

i will not fly....

I want love

poured in honey of pureness,

alone though my body walk

i carry your memories...

don't give me dreams

i want love

Reviews

[sjgeorge35]

Extremely small b***h I have here with the title,.,. until I read the poem.

First part has a customary scrawl and stock, but it’s not mundane and more like point-blank. Good for this sort of fare in my opinion.

You do a great job surging the font of the speak, and though lines seem lapsed, there is something viable and alive in the way you drive this piece.

predictable but barren which gives it a weird edge.

[Gaurav]

Thankyou for the review. Appreciate it.

[Chris Shaw]

Third stanza really touching. Memories and dreams are a poor substitute for love and that is what the author is wanting. Love is everything.

Chris

[Gaurav]

Thank you Chris...really appreciate your visit :)

[Light and ashes]

This poem immediately pulled on my heart strings from the second I started reading. It had some really beautiful thoughts and lines. The ending made my heart ache for the narrator, good job :)

[Gaurav]

Thank you Allie for the review :)

[Light and ashes]

You are welcome :)

[Mary Christabel George]

Its a simple & yet a very beautiful poem. To be loved by someone is a true gift which not all are gifted with. Your words touched souls.

[Gaurav]

Thank you Mary. Appreciate your feedback.

[Perkele.7885]

What I got from your poem, I had to dig for through the scattered unnecessary lines
and excess verbiage.
You want love. There is no doubt about that. You make that plain.
You do not want to play flighty head games to reach the place that love holds for you.
The pureness of honey is what you want to give and have matched in a two way relationship!

[Gaurav]

Thank you for the review.

[Lydia Shutter]

The thirst for love...to be loved and to care for someone....is all important in our lives. It drives us and keeps us going. If fantasy can morph into reality, it is sweet....so sweet. Lovely words. Lydi**

[Gaurav]

I am so glad that you liked it Lydia. Thank you.

[Emily]

Great poem!
I loved it!!
Well done!

[Gaurav]

Thank you Emily.

[nupur chauhan]

beautifully described the thirst of love ... awesome piece

[Gaurav]

Thankyou Nupur.

[nupur chauhan]

urs most welcome :)

[Corbin Driver]

Love a key essential of life! No one can truly live without it! Great work!

[Gaurav]

Thankyou for the review.

[Sarah King]

beautiful! well done dude!

[Gaurav]

Thankyou Sarah.