Life and Beyond

when i realized that i was given a second life and dishonored it as my first, the lord of death came in person

In callousness of water

were washed my thoughts,

every origin was killed

and the line of finish

commenced my origin...

She led the way to hell 

when mountains and night

witnessed my burial,

then i was bathed in a fire

to kill sins abound...

Yes i walked again here

with truth kissing my arrival,

happiness remained inferior

when bliss hugged my soul...

My address they knew

they - enemy of good,

and today they occupy my home..my soul 

How unfortunate is it to confess

they forced me to pursue them

how unfortunate

that i walked to life and beyond

and returned 

only to see death of innocence around...

Reviews

[dan]

Gaurav, I really like the conversational style of writing used in this piece. It helped to make a great poem really shine. Your tempo, word play and word CHOICES are impeccable. This piece is so impressive; I have to save a copy in my library favorites, so thank you for that. Thanks for sharing this. take care...dan

[Gaurav]

Thank you for appreciating the work Dan.

[Kristine Stewart]

I would like to put this to guitar...I'm not good but it has a good beat..not fun song but hey looks like a good one

[Gaurav]

Thank you Kristine.

[Sarah King]

you smashed it man! maybe not choosing the true rhythm to be place. But the meaning inside each word you used would capture anybody's soul. Good work!

[Gaurav]

Thank you Sarah for those kind words.

[A.marie.speaks]

Beautiful and sad. Inspiring as always! Great write

[Gaurav]

Thank you for the review.

[andrew mitchell]

I had images of the sacred Ganges and spiritual release and prays on the burning and a orange red sunset reading this good write!

[Gaurav]

Thank you Andrew.

[Red Music]

Your work is inspiring..impressive!

[Gaurav]

Thank you for those kind words.

[Emily]

Very well written!
Keep it up!!

[Gaurav]

Thank you Emily.

[theshygirl]

very impressive! i really enjoyed reading this poem it makes me think about the point of life and which things matter

very well written!

xxx Shy

[Gaurav]

Thank you for your kind words.

[Ella]

Wow this is a very great poem. It truly is a beautiful piece. I think you've done such an amazing job. You tell a story with your words. I enjoyed it!

[Gaurav]

Thank you Ella for the review.