Such a Romance

"Where lust follow journey to love, crave for such a romance"

The beginning of love

and some abrupt touches,

when lips tell stories

of how hard is to conceal kisses...

Closed are eyes where

and fingers search for places to hide,

cross legs intertwined

as if heat imitates snakes' ride..

Voices lose meaning to feelings

and lust follow journey to love,

hindrances from ego become support there

micro-universe when two souls make..

Crave for such a romance

hard to find and harder to follow,

underneath it has that meaning

possible to interpret

impossible to see...

Reviews

[barleygirl]

Most of this seems to be a sensual physical journey between two people . . . but then the 3rd stanza goes in a different direction, more philosophical (seems more cerebral & less sensory). I have to say, I prefer the other 3 stanzas becuz of the fresh sensory descriptions.

When reading thru lines 1 & 2 (2nd stanza) it does not sound right to me: "closed eyes are where and fingers search . . . " Maybe this needs some attention?

Good job using the snake imagery for intertwined legs in stanza 2.

[Gaurav]

Thank you so much for reviewing the work. Appreciate the visit.

[Lacey Sue]

I wish more people believed in romance and not other stuff

[Gaurav]

thank you for your review

[Teresa]

Emotional, Heart touching. amazing.

Whats New ?

But very good work I could never write something like this ever.

[Gaurav]

Thank you Teresa for amazing words :)

[Teresa]

Bruh for you anytime ;0 :)

[marilyn 1225]

i agree very sensual basically and good images too

[Gaurav]

thank you Merilyn :)

[emmajoy]

.. 'cross legs intertwined ~ as if heat imitates snakes' ride.. ' Nobody could deny the desire ...

Seems you've wrapped your words around a very loving and needy heart.. some beautiful phrasing in most places. However, the English is a little muddled in parts.. but am fairly sure it's not your first language, therefore, congratulations for the smoothness in most of this lovely post.

[Gaurav]

Yes sometimes i wonder how much important i have to give to romantic desires; but then its quite lovely :P

[emmajoy]

Anything beautiful is worth the price ..

[Gaurav]

Totally agree - anything beautiful is worth it :)

[Grey Evanescent]

Emotional and perfect descriptions, a very good piece. Keep it up :)

[Gaurav]

Thankyou for sweet review.

[Branden Stiles]

i dont know much about poems but from what i read it is good.

[Gaurav]

thanks brother :)

[Stan Lee]

"Hard to find and harder to follow." How true. Nice poem Gaurav :)

[Gaurav]

Thank you for the lovely comment :)

[Ella]

You have some very strong lines in this piece. The flow is a little off but besides that great job!

[Gaurav]

Thank you Ella.

[Dr. YumnaKay]

I agree with Barleygirl.. Though the story within is beautiful, the wording itself doesn't seem right which makes it harder to understand.. Maybe it's just me... Keep it up ☺

[Gaurav]

Appreciate your review. I will make corrections.

[Dr. YumnaKay]

You are welcome ☺