Such a Romance

"Where lust follow journey to love, crave for such a romance"

The beginning of love

and some abrupt touches,

when lips tell stories

of how hard is to conceal kisses...

Closed are eyes where

and fingers search for places to hide,

cross legs intertwined

as if heat imitates snakes' ride..

Voices lose meaning to feelings

and lust follow journey to love,

hindrances from ego become support there

micro-universe when two souls make..

Crave for such a romance

hard to find and harder to follow,

underneath it has that meaning

possible to interpret

impossible to see...

Reviews

[barleygirl]

Most of this seems to be a sensual physical journey between two people . . . but then the 3rd stanza goes in a different direction, more philosophical (seems more cerebral & less sensory). I have to say, I prefer the other 3 stanzas becuz of the fresh sensory descriptions.

When reading thru lines 1 & 2 (2nd stanza) it does not sound right to me: "closed eyes are where and fingers search . . . " Maybe this needs some attention?

Good job using the snake imagery for intertwined legs in stanza 2.

[Gaurav]

Thank you so much for reviewing the work. Appreciate the visit.

[wordman]

a beautiful poem of love and where passion takes you !

[Gaurav]

Thank you for the review.

[wordman]

my pleasure

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This is lovely, sensual flow. Nicely done.
Starz x

[Gaurav]

Thank you for the appreciation on work :)

[Unity Writes]

The opening is just beautiful and the story continues throughout, a beautiful poem with strong imagery and story.

[Gaurav]

Thank you for the review. Appreciate the visit.

[Unity Writes]

You are welcome :)