Seeking Self in Solitude

No fruit of happiness is as rich as the rise of men from grief

In a deep sorrow

Resides a painful peace,

So immense the grief has been

My atrocities please the heart..

 

While one loses body

I tell her to ‘be relieved’,

No snow after winter

Can soothe the mourning mouths..

 

I rest in torments

Of love and its fake assumptions,

When I bow down to neutral micros

My eyes see the cruel romance..

 

Tap the ceilings and let drops fall

Get immersed in the sea of loss,

The way will you find

In abysmal labyrinth of destruction..

 

Cry those souls that wander in dreams

Emancipation of the death is beyond laws,

Engulf the misery of happiness

From solitude will begin the inner journey..

Reviews

[pia]

Self discovery can come from within a person who spends time alone with their thoughts and analyses their own actions. This was well written. And well worded.
I suggest only two lines need a lik re touching to give a better flow.
"When one loses body. I tell them to "be relieved"'
And
"Emancipation of the dead.. or DEATH"
Either one
I liked this
It had haunting imagery which happened to struck the heart and instil feat yet curiosity

[Gaurav]

Thank you so much for your review. I have edited the flow as suggested :)

[Najam Us Saher]

True. Often in times of solitude one discovers themselves. I really liked this poem. Thank you for sharing!

[Gaurav]

Thank you for the review. Appreciate it :)

[Najam Us Saher]

You're most welcome :)

[apennylate]

*Welcome to "Pure Rhymes" Thanks for joining, great to have you...!*

Emancipation awaits the souls of wandering dreams... Tap the ceiling, let it fall, at a loss... Torment sets in... My evil pleases my beating heart... You laid out my feelings in a labyrinth of destruction...

[Gaurav]

Thank you for your review; appreciate it :)

[CA Anurag Sharma]

brilliant piece of writing... strong portray of emotions...
"No snow after winter
Can soothe the mourning mouths.."

[Gaurav]

thank you Anurag

[Stan Lee]

Great writing. I like your choice of words. You portrayed lots of emotion. Thanks for sharing :)

[Gaurav]

thank you for your feedback

[wordman]

and a journey it is,loved it !

[Gaurav]

thank you for the review!