Bleeding Is No Kill

It breaks but isn't broken

It sinks but doesn't drown

the damage often spoken

the pain, a different sound.

It beats but doesn't batter

It flies but has no wings

the mind succumbs to matter

where the angel flutter sings.

It cracks but doesn't crumble

It lives but always dies

love is just a fumble

grasping through the lies.

It wins but always loses

It stops but often starts

at the shocks and many bruises

of the sum of many parts.

It's lost but never leaves

It's dead but doesn't die

magic in how it breathes

tragic now its sigh.

Full of blood, it bleeds

Yet the bleeding is no kill

Its endless needs it feeds

the bending to its will.

But it's just another piece

in the function of the whole

This heart will one day cease

but never seize the soul.

Reviews

[Bystander]

"Bleeding is no kill" The title alone is brilliant. The simplification of grammar and word structure follows the tenets of "less is more"... even more so you as the writer knows less is often more work. You found the depth of each line extracting only the perfect moments. Well done.

[Devons]

It's interesting that so many people are drawn to this poem more than others, so perhaps the title does do some of the work. Thank you very much indeed.

[Beccy]

The heart, the spiritual and physical construct of our being, both so closely wove as to be quite inseparable, though often we wish it were not so.

Without it we die, yet with it, we die so many 'little deaths'.

Really enjoyed this, the pace and rhythm is flawless.

Beccy.

[Devons]

To be praised by those I praise is always the most gratifying. Thank you, Beccy.

[Jane Taylor Hardy]

A mesmerizing piece culminating with a beautiful crescendo.....soft cadence throughout building to a passionate ending. A stunning ink.

[Devons]

I bow and colour modestly at such praise. Thank you :)

[Cladine]

I love it!The first line is captivating," It breaks but isn't broken" you are absolutely right. You can already caught an attention with those words. Awesome work :)

[Devons]

Wondrous, thank you!

[Coyote Poetry]

I enjoyed the complete poem. Filled with direct and honest thoughts.
"Full of blood, it bleeds
Yet the bleeding is no kill
Its endless needs it feeds
the bending to its will."
You took the reader in and you held them. I liked the above lines. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Devons]

It must be something about the title - this poem seems to draw the most interest.
Thanks very much indeed, my friend, for your words and attention.

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome. Good titles do draw the readers.

[Writer at last! Sky ~]

I like the way you had expressed the feelings in the lines. Sometimes we are really bleeding but its no kill...Great wrote!

[Devons]

Yeah, what doesn't kill you makes you stronger, isn't that it? But it hurts a lot, all the same.
read moreYeah, what doesn't kill you makes you stronger, isn't that it? But it hurts a lot, all the same.
Thanks very much indeed.

[Writer at last! Sky ~]

I agree you, yes it hurts a lot...

[Maja]

This is a really good read. I love how you were able to capture the image of a heart - and not just the physical - in this poem. Great work! I'm so glad I read this.

[Devons]

My cheeks colour in bashful appreciation. Thank you.

[dan]

Devons, You have reviewed one of my writes so I am retuning the favor. The rhyme scheme in this write is regular and steady but never sounds forced, a natural flow. I tried to determine what IT was, and I thought that you were describing life. Instead it is describing the heart, the giver of life; so I get 10 points for being close. It is a very lovely write, and I am bookmarking your page so I can review more of your work at a later time. take care...dan

[Devons]

Thank you very much indeed, sir. You shall be my friend. Actually, it was written straight for a contest called "The Anatomy of the Heart" - didn't win, of course.

[Epicness]

This is a very powerful poem and an extremely well written one. I especially like the lines "it cracks but doesn't crumble, it lives but never dies."

[Devons]

Many thanks for your epicness.

[Rick Puetter]

Hi Devon,

Another interesting piece and a powerful observation on Man's heart. Yes, it gets battered about quite a bit, and it survives with resilience. There is a end, though, tragic as that seems to us.

Another thoughtful piece.

Best regards,

Rick

[Devons]

Thanks very much again, sir. I bow in gratitude.