The Empty-coffered Purser

from an image born

Only a word, and blurred, and backward

White on black and vice versa

A hair-line crack, all split, and fractured

A tainted Dame - all doomed to curse her:

PEACE: the empty-coffered purser.

Reviews

[Sweet_pale_cacophony]

*just by reading

[Sweet_pale_cacophony]

This is very strong in its brevity.This is one of your relatively shorter poems i believe but there was no need for more words.This is perfect.Was this too based on the picture here...or is it as such on peace?..either ways this is very neat,compact and so very well thought.
I like 'hair line crack'..'tainted dame' and course the title itself :)
I like how you are constantly evolving with your writes.One can not judge your writing just be reading one or two poem of yours...cause i feel you constantly outwit yourself with your words...and there is always something new.

[alesuriko]

Well that intense. Such passion and explicit imagery that is purposefully difficult to see and decipher. Wonderful flow and rhythm, beautiful contrast and images that hold so much meaning and negativity. Peace has really become something that no one can truly see, the meaning is blurred and politicians and military turn it on it's head using peace as a reason to fight and kill. The one word is both negative and positive, manipulated and manipulative. Everyone wants it but everyone hates it. Beautiful expression. I love this poem.

[E. A. Fielder]

It had a very good flow for such a short poem. I find that it's harder to write a short poem that has a good start and a good finish than it is to write a long one. If you are able to wrap the imagery and the emotion together in only a few lines I think that is wonderful! Keep writing!

[Tate Morgan]

very good

[Griffin Hill]

Short and sweet; packed with meaning. Love it.

[R.S. Wilder]

A maverick. lolololol!!!
I loved it.

[Annette Jay Sweeney]

This says so much with so little. Very impressive. I do feel that even though the last line as the title fits this poem, since it is so short you use almost a fifth of the poem to title it. You may want to re-work this somehow.

[Liza]

a clouded vision that longs for a sunny day
i see a lot of grey - the urge for the light or darkness to win
insightful expression.