Made of Dragon's Breath

She's near enough to feel

but far too close to see

I know the form

and the excited heat

the shape of the body

beneath the sheet

The grasping, the getting

the taking and giving

the wanting and the having

the cold-sweat-feet

Exclamations of exultation

a want of cheap sensation

It takes imagination

to thrash hot meat

The slither and slide

of this flesh-pot grind

is less an act of worship

than a state of mind

Less an act of love

but a symptom of a fever

worked-up from a vision

of the teaser and the pleaser

and the follow-my-leader

To be up-close-and-personal

with the Devil's desire

To jump into the fire

of a funeral pyre

Made of dragon's breath

is lust

from a thirst for quenching feeling

to a feeling quenched of trust

Emancipation of dessication 

finds ironic salvation

in a momentary elation

then an empty husk

Beside a crust of sweat-dried leather

and a sack of bulbous flesh

a heap of skin untethered 

and a bed of fattened mess

A devastation of degradation

in a warm puddle of guilt

From where? For whom?

For why? you cry

Desecration of a womb?

Desolation of the soul

in which you're making room

for more of what you felt before

and less the feeling after?

A space for love and none for a w***e?

Or a cut for a bleeding plaster?

Reviews

[Abdul Aziz]

Brutal, and to the point. Your words cut through all artificial affectations of society and present an unadulterated view.
"Emancipation of dessication

finds ironic salvation

in a momentary elation

then an empty husk"
Brilliant. Prople sell themselves (figuratively and sometimes literally) for this momentary elation, not thinking about the void it leaves afterward.

[Shante Payne]

I rather enjoyed reading this...if flows almost as if it had written itself. You get down to the nitty gritty (for lack of a better term) of what sex is all about, the real not what people would like to imagine it is. Good write as always I admire your pen!

[Devons]

Thank you, my friend. Good to hear from you as always.

[Poetic Beauty]

This is sensual. Knowing loving and respecting the.person you are.becoming intimate with brings on a deeper soul binding experience than a simple sexual experience. It is allowing two souls to connect.in the deepest way possible. Literally becoming one. The anticipation in this.piece.is clearly felt and the Aww of the moment shines through. Love is glorious and what netters way to celebrate.it the connecting as one

[Ama May Cooper]

What a lovely piece of work. I find its cheeky , and also painful .. but beautiful its laden with these mixed feelings that im struggling to not bounce from.
Your wording is strong , you description very creative and very nice to hear. Well done

[r. f. jordan]

this is powerful poetry about emotionally charged issues. the rhyme scheme is well constructed and the subject matter rolls well from lust to consequence. nice work.

[Jazmen]

I liked it at first, It was easy to read and had an interesting twist of words and I didn't know if i was going to be reading about a dragon or of a sexual flurry between lovers..
Honestly, I don't know what I read. The idea went astray, I was too concentrated on your choice of words, I think you should fix all the parts that aren't as strong as you know they can be.
You seem a very talented writer already, nice vocabulary, great thoughts, something seems unfinished to me about this poem. I'm going to read it again and again. Until I know exactly what it's about.

Edit:
It's your metaphors that threw me off as a 1st time reader, lost in the rhyme, we stray away from the point. The idea is rad. Love it.
Keep it up, you're indeed gifted!

[Devons]

It's about sex !!

[Wondering Mind]

well isn't this the ugly truth?!! Written profoundly, of course... I have read that it is so ( will never admit to having been there)

[Shay]

wow that is so good, i loved it. you defintely captured the moment with this poem and i enjoyed it. it is also very well written

[koty bell]

i liked this one great work:)

[Gomer LePoet]

Hmmmm- think you took some of the romance out of this escapade when you mentioned the sack of bulbous flesh! I've never looked at making love that way before lol. :)

[Sweet_pale_cacophony]

This poem here is very hard hitting and as the other review says brutal.It is introspective and also stimulates a lot of self reflecting questions in the reader.It argues the very notion of desire and the momentary satiation of a feeling which is purely need based and carnal.Very strong feelings expressed and in an equally strong and unapologetic manner.
There are these lines here as :
Desolation of the soul
in which you're making room
for more of what you felt before
and less the feeling after?..

They hit the very core of soul and makes one really sit up and think.
Throughout there is a sense of rhythm though and a technical finesse.