On A Balmy Summers Night

Just simple words

Shooting stars 'cross ink black sky
the pallid moon looked on,
a breeze roused sleeping summer leaves
but briefly, then was gone.

A fox bark echoed, trailed away
through spinny and beyond,
nothing stirred, the lillies slept
atop the night stilled pond.

'cross barleyed acres all at peace
through farmyard ever on,
silence played on balmy night
a symphony an' song.

'Til sunrise lit the eastern sky,
then man stirred, woke again,
serenaded soft to 'nother day
by bird calls sweet refrain.

How beautiful this life we live
what wonders to behold,
more beauty found in nature's gifts
than platinum and gold

Author's Note

Quickly written before toodling off to work...hopefully ok !! Have added 4th stanza, does it fit ???

Reviews

[Sheila Kline]

I think the 4th. stanza is perfect, and a good addition as it brings man into the scene along with the images of nature. Your words flow; all 'tis lovely!!

[Gee]

Thank you Sheila

[MsJewel]

I love the images you have created in this gorgeous poem....so vivid..so real..and the rhythm and rhyme is spot on. A pleasure to read! Julie

[Gee]

Thank you Ms J

[Im His Daughter]

Your submission is now read in the http://www.writerscafe.org/contests/Nature%2C-Auroras%2C-Lights%2C-Trees%2C-Water%2C-Outdoors-Contest/54059/ please stay tuned for the winning poems. Thank you for your entry.

[George Coombs]

Further beautiful well crafted writing, ys, for me the fourth stanza does fit and it brings everything together so very well

[Gee]

Cheers George, appreciate your kind words

[George Coombs]

Your welcome

[duff]

A whim sparks beauty. Sometimes the less we examine the end product still shines. You did a great job taking the reader on a most tranquil journey.

[Gee]

Thank you Duff

[duff]

My pleasure Gee

[Relic]

I would love to be able to write so eloquently before jotting off. It takes me so long, and even then I'm not always right.

I like every verse of this. You speak of a place I would love to stay. :)

[Gee]

The woods and open fields are just a 5 minute stroll from my home. The pooch and I walk them often, but it is at night when the interesting stuff happens.
Simple rhyming verse I'm sure you are more than capable of penning. If I can..
Thank you

[Christopher Jaremy]

I love this. There is nothing more beautiful than the universe and all its glorious splendors. Well done.

[Gee]

Cheers Christopher

[Ruth]

I love stanza 4 and the whole poem is stunning...really gives the reader calm and serenity! :)

[Gee]

Thank you Poppy

[Namrata Nandagopal]

Gee, that's a beautiful portrayal of a quiet night. Really awesome. Can't believe you coined all that "quickly" "before toodling off to work"!!!
Hats off to you👍

[Gee]

Thank you Namrata

[William Gardner]

simple with a straightforward flow. The elegance of a gesture. Simply something sitting well with whomever.
Cheers

[Gee]

Thank you William